Hey everyone. I would appreciate if someone looked over this essay for grammar errors, etc. I think it's also pretty interesting and you could learn something from it.

Oh, if you prefer it in ms word, just give me an email and I'll send it over. It should be easy to tell where the paragraphs start. Thanks!!


In 1849, gold was discovered in California resulting in the pioneering spirits of over 17 million Americans by 1890. Amongst these people was a businessman named Leob

 

Just a quickie - get rid of all the apostrophes in 1930s, 1940s, etc. They shouldn't be there.

 

Are you sure they aren't supposed to be there? I've seen it done both ways. Any other input?

 

they're not supposed to be there

 

 

I edited the whole thing. I changed some sentence structure and edited as I felt appropriate.

I think your first sentence is awkward but am not quite sure what you want to say there. You might change it to:

"In 1849, the discovery of gold in California induced a stream of pioneers to the California hills. By 1890, over seventeen million Americans had undertaken the search for gold."

Also, I don't think they were all Americans, but that's beside the point...

Anyways, here's the edited version (except the first line).

[B]In 1849, gold was discovered in California, resulting in the pioneering spirits of over seventeen million Americans by 1890. Amongst these people was a businessman named Leob

 

[QUOTE=JonBoy,Nov 30 2004, 10:09 AM]During the 1960s, there were many new styles of jeans such as embroidered jeans, painted jeans, and psychedelic jeans (which were very popular among university students). In the 1970s, jeans started being produced in sweatshops in third world countries. This drove the price of jeans down and became more affordable for everyone. During the 1980s, jeans became high fashion clothing after famous designers started making their own styles with their own labels.

During the 1990s, the growth of jean sales finally reached its peak. Through the remainder of the 20th century, jeans remained a popular item of clothing and were very fashionable, no longer worn for their durability. Through Levi and Jacob's efforts, ingenuity, and foresight, Levi Strauss and Company

 

Doh - missed those. I changed the rest but was obviously in a hurry. Thanks for fixing that.

 

Just as a sidenote, I actually took the "s" off of "efforts" originally - I think it can actually work either way.

"Their effort" or "their efforts" - either is okay, I think. Where's Bill (magician) when you need him?!?

 

Hey JonBoy, thanks a lot for your time! I really appreciate it.