Feedback apprecited, brochure design
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Change the sentence "We began to develop.....". Sounds like you stopped when you found out how expensive it would be. Better to present as "We have developed our products......"
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More cowbell.
Sorry, someone had to say it.
In terms of actual feedback, most of it has been said already. The overall look is quite bright. I'd suggest a darker shade of blue. The center white column on the first page needs to be filled in somehow. The header text on the second page is running into itself (the Y is running over the letters above it).
Sorry, someone had to say it.
In terms of actual feedback, most of it has been said already. The overall look is quite bright. I'd suggest a darker shade of blue. The center white column on the first page needs to be filled in somehow. The header text on the second page is running into itself (the Y is running over the letters above it).
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Originally Posted by mns2k,Apr 28 2009, 08:56 AM
Change the sentence "We began to develop.....". Sounds like you stopped when you found out how expensive it would be. Better to present as "We have developed our products......"
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I've taking many, many great suggestions and incorporated them into the latest design. Check out the first post, and again, thanks for the feedback!
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a definite improvement 
since i added 2 cents last time, i'll just throw in a penny's worth now:
i personally don't really like the typeface used on the back pages; the headings are not all that legible. also, any more than 2 different typefaces and the piece can start to lose cohesiveness.
i still think the copy needs to be kerned tighter
and...i still think the logo on the front right panel is way too big
all in all a terrific round 2
i actually like the "busy" inside page also
since i added 2 cents last time, i'll just throw in a penny's worth now:
i personally don't really like the typeface used on the back pages; the headings are not all that legible. also, any more than 2 different typefaces and the piece can start to lose cohesiveness.
i still think the copy needs to be kerned tighter
and...i still think the logo on the front right panel is way too big
all in all a terrific round 2
i actually like the "busy" inside page also
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Loving the progress. you have really breathed new life into it
my critiques are little tiny placement things and some text crafting nothing serious and please forgive my tinkering
first page:
1. Right Panel: logo placement is funky ....it is nearly touching the leaf and is not floating in the negative space created by the fold line and the leaves very well...try scooting it up and to the left enough to give you a place to float the tagline to the right of the logo. Left justify the tagline
[COLOR=purple]I am going to do some quick PS edits and post then to show my meaning (don
my critiques are little tiny placement things and some text crafting nothing serious and please forgive my tinkering
first page:
1. Right Panel: logo placement is funky ....it is nearly touching the leaf and is not floating in the negative space created by the fold line and the leaves very well...try scooting it up and to the left enough to give you a place to float the tagline to the right of the logo. Left justify the tagline
[COLOR=purple]I am going to do some quick PS edits and post then to show my meaning (don
