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Old Sep 7, 2010 | 05:54 AM
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Think you need to work on your wording a bit. Strange wording like this"

"All data feed are created and managed by humans. No computer software are used to eliminate any type of errors."

It reads, to me, that you don't or won't use computer software that eliminates errors, leaving the door open for errors.
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Old Sep 7, 2010 | 07:12 AM
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Originally Posted by suvh8r,Sep 7 2010, 05:54 AM
Think you need to work on your wording a bit. Strange wording like this"

"All data feed are created and managed by humans. No computer software are used to eliminate any type of errors."

It reads, to me, that you don't or won't use computer software that eliminates errors, leaving the door open for errors.
Thank you for the tips so far everyone, I really appreciated. I'm trying to get a couple of my buddies that majored in English and journalism to help me rewrite the contents. Sometimes I find myself writing poor sentences because I try not to confuse the potential clients. I want to make it simple and easy to understand about web development and not using technical words.

As far as data feed..if you're interested to learn more about it I can explain to you how the process work and why i said no data feed software use.

and Happy Tuesday! Back to work day everyone
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Old Sep 7, 2010 | 07:47 AM
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Yeah there are quite a few sentences that are grammatically wrong. You should really have some one proof read it, I would feel quite uneasy dealing with a company that does web management, but has errors on their own site.

"We will reply to your email within 4 hours of receiving"

Recommend:

Once we have received your email, you will be contacted within 4 hours.

"NGM offers a complete website management services"

Correction:

NGM offers complete website management services
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